And of the Era

No one these days is safe inside.
Live on an island, they'll still find you.
No matter which way, people will die.
Warmongers dictate us theres no where to go.
Powers are growing until one of them falls.
Chaos takes order and insanity knows best.
Inocent people caught up in the wars.
Die like the villains should, an agonising death.

What are we fighting for these days?
Why do we have to fight just so we can survive?
They take our homes they take our strength.
They take all our lives.

I walk along the lonely crowded streets.
Guns ring out in shame.
Kids standing in groups with their dope.
An echo of death calling out a name.
While the dealers are hid inside.
Women on corners many bite the gun.
And the sound of the inocent cry
and terrorist wars are won.

What are we fighting for these days?
Why do we have to fight just so we can survive?
They take our homes they take our strength.
They take all our lives.

Your son is killed, yours daughters sell.
Yours husbands walked, There nothing left.
Toxic world, toxicated your soul.
Escaped with the reeper, New form of hell.

What are we fighting for these days?
Why do we have to fight just so we can survive?
They take our homes they take our strength.
They take all our lives.

What are we fighting for these days?
Why do we have to fight just so we can survive?
They take our homes they take our strength.
They take all our lives.

it was well written for the most part but it seemed to be missing a real catch, something to go back to between each verse and link it all together, get that and you'll strengthen it a lot

crit it's so cold in heaven?

yea jus wanna say that if people r gonna rate this song poor at least give me some feedback. dont jus say its pants and then bugger off. if ur gonna rate it actually say where its harsh otherwise there not much point in using the poll system.

thanx if u follow the above.

[morrissey]

I rated it poor, and then buggered off... just to make myself laugh

and I succeeded!

well i dusnt take much. twats usually do that. people with descentsy usually respect other peoples threads but obviously uv placed urself in the twat bin.

[morrissey]

Originally Posted by Infinatedestiny

well i dusnt take much. twats usually do that. people with descentsy usually respect other peoples threads but obviously uv placed urself in the twat bin.

Did you seriously just call me a twat? You know you made yourself an easy target, I had to do it.

I was going to give this a serious critique... but don't insult me without knowing anything about me. If you want to talk about respect... respect other people's grammatical knowledge, and their wish that you typed semi-coherently. Start with that, and I'll consider critiquing this.

u call that being serious....i no people that hav seen u on here and yes they think ur a twat aswell. now u can prove ur not a twat an bugger off...or u can prov u r one and keep replying but im goin. bye XxX

[InMe]

I thought it was pretty good and parts of it actually created an image in my mind. I agree with andy_roo10 that it feels as if its missing a real catch but if you go through it you could make it quite a powerful song i believe.

cheers thanx. at least u crit songs rather than jus come on here an mess about

[morrissey]

Originally Posted by Infinatedestiny

u call that being serious....i no people that hav seen u on here and yes they think ur a twat aswell. now u can prove ur not a twat an bugger off...or u can prov u r one and keep replying but im goin. bye XxX

Yeah yeah, everyone hates me. I'm used to it. I actually enjoy having illiterate 14-year olds try to insult me.

I can take this place very seriously, but it is fun to have a mix of both humour and seriousness.

If you would like, I won't critique any of your songs, ever. That works for me. And you don't have to critique any of my songs (though your "critiques" aren't actually critiques any ways, just unreadable garbage... but that's another matter).

Oh well

[theredwonder]

theredwonder = God(see username)

therefore my opinion overrules all. just for future reference...











/morrissey stamps on your worthless face

//in my opinion

welcome to the twat bin...hope u enjoy ur stay...i see uv brought a firend. is that ur only one? ahh well...i see ur in here somethin. ok...so...anyone else apart from this dude feel free to crit and i will gladly crit back.

[theredwonder]

Originally Posted by Infinatedestiny

welcome to the twat bin...hope u enjoy ur stay...i see uv brought a firend. is that ur only one? ahh well...i see ur in here somethin. ok...so...anyone else apart from this dude feel free to crit and i will gladly crit back.

wait... did you just take away my right to crit a song i don't even want to crit?

/bastard

[morrissey]

Originally Posted by Infinatedestiny

welcome to the twat bin...hope u enjoy ur stay...i see uv brought a firend. is that ur only one? ahh well...i see ur in here somethin. ok...so...anyone else apart from this dude feel free to crit and i will gladly crit back.

I don't need back-up on this (though thank you, redwonder). You've got a problem with me, and there is nothing I can do about it. I'm sure you're a nice person in real life, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt. But you come across as a downright idiot over the internet, and you do it by choice. If you wanted to appear semi-intelligent, or have your opinion mean something, communicate in a way that is comprehensible to the other users. "yur a twat coz i sy so!!!!11!!1!!!" doesn't gain you respect around these parts. Just think about it.

[severed_heaven]

If you're just gonna float around picking arguments with everyone, you're clearly fighting losing battle mate.

well i think if u read the posts u will find that i wasnt the one that started it. its always this morrisey guy that starts it. and whose fighting? im jus waiting to go out.

[theredwonder]

Originally Posted by Infinatedestiny

its always this morrisey guy that starts it.

/canes insolent child

[morrissey]

Originally Posted by Infinatedestiny

well i think if u read the posts u will find that i wasnt the one that started it. its always this morrisey guy that starts it. and whose fighting? im jus waiting to go out.

Yes, I made a joke. A funny one at that. And then you well all fucktardish on me. Oh well.

well u no wat u can do.*waves goodbye*